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Christopher Van Name's avatar

Such a vivid description. I have had that nightmare where I become cognisant that I’m trapped in it and can’t break through the ice. The ceiling. No breath. And then…, the puppet is loose. Brilliant, Brandi.

Brandi Lynn's avatar

It is paralyzing - isn’t it? ✨

Christopher Van Name's avatar

It is.

Lawrence Omoregie Jr's avatar

Wow. Such beautiful piece

Glad I found you

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Thank you ✨

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

There's such power in your words Brandi. The brevity and the somatic nature of them let me feel them before my mind had a chance to catch up. There's no unnecessary description, just force behind lines like "It stops. It breaks. / Every nerve falls slack."

This piece feels like a journey to the centre of the earth, but in a fever-driven hallucination or dream, and the severence at the end lands so well.

Beautiful writing.

Brandi Lynn's avatar

Thank you for reading so deeply. I am glad that the quick, descent came through. I appreciate you taking the time to write such a wonderful comment ✨

Priyanka Jaiprakash ⚘ Poetry's avatar

I loved reading the vivid details and also struck by the musicality in your verses.

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Thank you ✨

Pelle Martens's avatar

I don't know how to explain it, but this felt familiar ❤️

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No explanation needed - I totally understand ✨

Aaliya's avatar

Brilliant piece my love

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Thank you Aaliya ✨

Petra's avatar

Great imagery. I could feel the panic and release. <3

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<3

Jay's avatar

Haughty

Off Ramp to Brave Spaces's avatar

Wicked

Stephanie ♡'s avatar

Wow…so very powerful, Brandi. I felt this one. That final line…a puppet cut loose…chills. 🙏💕🫶

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Thank you ✨